这篇essay很简单，却被哈佛商学院作为文书范文！

哈佛商学院文书范文

哈佛商学院文书的题目如下：

You’re applying to Harvar Business School. We can see your resume, school transcripts, extra-curricular activities, awars, post-MBA career goals, test scores an what your recommeners have to say about you. What else woul you like us to know as we consier your caniacy? (No wor limit)

你正在申请哈佛商学院。我们可以看到你的简历、学校成绩单、课外活动、奖项、工商管理硕士职业目标、考试分数和你的推荐者所说的关于你的事。那么，作为候选人，你还有什么是希望我们知道的？(无字数限制)

也就是说，在你的文书中不能出现任何材料中已经提及的经历或过去，而是需要通过这篇文书补充一些招生官不了解的事情。那么该写些什么？如何去写？不妨让我们来看一篇范文。

What else woul I like you to know?

I am who I am toay mostly because of my brother [name]. [name] was born when I was four years ol, an he ha an extremely rare birth efect calle Robert’s Synrome. At the time, he was one of a hanful in the worl to have it. He was born without arms, couln’t walk or talk, an ha many other severe physical an mental efects. It was a complete shock to my parents. He was only expecte to live for a ay or two, but after a few weeks in the hospital he was healthy enough to come home with us. I was too young to really unerstan what was going on; I was just excite to have a brother.

[name] was a full-time job for us. For his entire life he was incapable of oing anything for himself. My parents an I in’t have much, but we i have an amazing family an group of friens to support us. We couln’t have taken care of [name] without all of them, an seeing this level of sacrifice from so many people ha a huge impact on me. No one ever complaine. No one ever hesitate. We just i what we ha to, an I saw first-han at a young age how important it is to work together an help those aroun you. An our family (extene inclue), became so much closer because of how we came together for [name], an that closeness still hols toay.

[name] ene up living for about four years, an I’m so grateful for the lessons I learne from him. My generosity, kinness, team work, an inepenence, come irectly from him being in my life. An learning to eal with that level of stress an responsibility mae me a much, much stronger person than I woul have been without.

So my family an I have carrie [name]’s memory with us since he passe in the form of giving to others. About ten years ago, we starte a charity calle [institution], whose purpose is to supply bes an being to chilren in our area who are without. The thought was that [name] spent most of his life in be, an if we han’t ha a ecent one for him his life woul have been so uncomfortable. As of this year, we have supplie almost [number] kis with mattresses, blankets, an stuffe animals, an each year we are able to help more an more chilren.

This mentality of service has been a big part of my life since we starte [institution], an as I got oler I wante to start branching out to new service opportunities. An let me tell you, [city] has been a great place to start. This city has mae a serious impression on me. Anyone who’s from here either loves it or hates it, but either way, [city] is the kin of place that efines a person. [city] is the unerog, full of unrealize potential. Living in a place like this has opene my eyes to the heartache of misse opportunities (not even mentioning our sports teams…), an it’s because of this that I’ve become so involve in the community. I’ve been able to work with so many very smart, riven people, an together we’ve one a lot to make a positive impact. My work with the [institution] has allowe me to help raise over [number] for small, local NFPs, an my work with the [institution] has complemente that with a more hans-on, service base focus. An being a Big Brother through [institution] has allowe me to make a lasting, consistent impact in a more focuse way.

All of these, together with working for a commercial bank, have given me a very satisfying life balance. I’m able to o so many things, an able to make a tangible impact in each of them. But sometimes I o so much that I on’t take the time to stop an look aroun – to process what’s happening. This was missing in my life. I know that the path I’ been taking was the right one for me, I’ just never truly felt reay to move on to the next phase.

This change this past summer when I i my first [event]. If you’re not familiar with this, it’s a [number] mile swim followe by a [number] mile bike an then a [number] mile run. Still seems nuts to me. I’ never one a triathlon of any kin before I signe up for this, but was so overwhelme by watching my frien compete in the same one the year before. I’ll never forget the moment: I was watching a quariplegic go up the final – an largest – hill in his wheelchair, sweating, grunting, an crying. An finishing. I’m pretty sure everyone watching that was crying; it was one of the most moving things I’ ever seen. So I signe up.

Training for this requires a serious amount of time, most of which you’re alone with your thoughts (no music allowe uring the race, so you train without). Eight hours biking, five running, an two swimming, each week for seven months, is so mentally taxing, an your min goes to some new places. I starte reflecting a lot, an really began to unerstan the choices I’ve mae an the impact they’ve ha. I thought a lot about where I was in life, why I was there, an what I woul have one ifferently along the way. I thought about what I wante for my future, not just career-wise, but in orer to be happy. An it’s not so much that my views change from this experience, but I feel like I’ve gaine a new level of clarity. I’m much more confient in my life goals, an can pursue them with prie an conviction.

I’m now reay to move on to the next phase of my life, an am very excite to o so.

这篇范文出自2014年的一位申请者，essay题目叫做《The Giver》，通读全文你会发现这篇essay遣词造句出人意料的简单朴实，高中生也能毫无障碍地看懂，但是却成功入选HBS“essay写作指导”的最佳范文之一，为什么呢？

首先，文章情感表达的真实感人，每段衔接的非常自然，语言朴实地道，不露声色的回答了why MBA, why now。

其次，哈佛商学院“essay写作指导”的编辑是这样评价的：这是一个关于某人的人生轨迹如何被自己兄弟出生而影响的事件，事件本身就很有意义。而且，这件事改变了作者对待社会对待他人的方式，甚至改变了他的信仰，这种影响力是强大的。而能够用简单清晰的方式表达出这种强大的文章就是powerful essay 。

每篇powerful essay都需要做到的一点是“show who you are beyon your resume”——具体来说就是“你的重点是什么，生活中你想要做什么，什么事成就了现在的你，现在你为什么想做这件事“。

因为，招生官已经知道你上的什么学校，参加过什么俱乐部，经历过什么职业，但是他们不知道这些经历如何影响和造就了你，所以你就是要告诉他们这些，这就是这篇essay的意义。

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