雅思写作中让考官扣分的常见开头

中式英文

Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart floweropene angrily……

Topic 2- The population problem

The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the citycenters of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

Topic3- Is there fairness in toay’s business worl?

I think in toay’s society, there is no fairness in the business worl. Forexample, I always choppe when I go out buy things……

Topic 4- The avantage of being a nice person

Being a nice person have many avantage. I believe if a people always oba things, he will get “baoying”.

观点模糊态度暧昧

Topic-Shoul college stuents be allowe to get marrie?

I think this topic is very har to say. Because I am still very little,only 17, an not marrie, so this topic is very ifficult for me……

偏离主题

Topic-It is sai that nowaays one can not acquire thequalifications an quality essential to success through university eucation. Towhat extent o you agree or isagree with the statement? (雅思真题)

I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To havethese important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English,music tools, an etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, ourfriens an from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

语法错误惨不忍睹

Topic-If chilren behave baly, shoul their parents acceptresponsibility an also be punishe? (雅思真题)

About this problem, my think is if chilren behave baly, then parents arenot right. Because teach chil is parent’s responsibility. So we also punishparents too besies chilren is also shoul.

过分简单没有重点

Topic-The importance of environmental protection

This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

用词不当 表达不准

Topic-Shoul college stuents be allowe to get marrie?

I think college stuents shoul not be allowe to get marrie because theyare very young an so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

意思重复原地踏步

Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a goo thing. Anit is a ba thing. It brings no benefits to our society an it is even sometimesharmful to our society.

中国俗语胡乱翻译

Topic 1-Is it goo to have a large family?

I think it is goo to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe asentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……

正确说法：Happiness lies in having many chilren

Topic 2 -Shoul we preten to know everything or amit our ignorance?

We all know, our Chinese ol fathers an granfathers sai: “Know is know,on’t know is on’t know”……

Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influence by his/herfamily?

Chinese ol wors says very goo: Dragon born ragon, phoenix born phoenix,rat’s son can make hole……

Topic 4- The avantage of being a nice person

I believe one sentence:“A goo person is all life safe”. We Chinese peoplealways say: “Goo has goo pay, ba has ba pay”.

观点武断 态度强硬

Topic1-The importance of confience

In my opinion, confience is the most important thing for a person. All thesuccessful people in the worl are full of confience. While those people whoon’t have confience, they all have faile.

Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem

I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who on’t obeythe traffic rules, we shoul put all of them into prison. If we o that, I’msure there will be no traffic problem any more.